Thursday 27 January 2011

Can You Spot 6 Mistakes In This Article?

We are BACK!
Recently I was browsing the famous Gulf News and stumbled across this article - Shattered lives after traffic accidents in UAE . I was appalled to find so many grammatical and structural mistakes. After reading the article those journalists surely did not give the respect and attention this article deserved. Can you spot them?

20 comments:

Anonymous said...

On the whole, this is pretty well researched. He's got enough detail in here to construct a 'moving picture' account of the incident.

He's obviously meticulously asked question after question, i.e. what lane were they driving in, what car were they driving, what colour...

It takes an experienced hand to think of those questions and I doubt the average armchair pundit or trade magazine hack here could have managed.

However, it does fall down because of the melodramatic turn of phrase, ie. "to their doom" and "breathed her last".

A word of advice to the journalist: play it straight, murder your darlings.

Anonymous said...

Oh for fuck's sake. Absent for months, and come back with a watery critique of not-actually-that-bad-by-pitiful-standards-of-local-media article?

I suspect DMO is "under new management". If this is all you've got it's soon going to be as hard-hitting as a the National is on regional revolutions

mediamonster said...

Welcome aboard, Savior!

Anonymous said...

"horrors of speeding and reckless driving shahnawaz has started a website in her sister's name"

Shahnawaz is name and S is not capital, "her sister"??? Is the person male (I verified on website). Oh Pathetic for a reputed newspaper to miss it! LOL

Moreover it seems like mishmash and "Cut and paste" by the end you do not realize the head or tail of the article.

Anonymous said...

He is on Dh8,000 a month. He writes for an Al Nisr publication. What did you expect?

Anonymous said...

Food has lost its licence. Good Food doesn't deserve a licence. Taste doesn't have a licence at all. Will Carrefour, the home of cheap food be the saviour of the food magazine market!

Anonymous said...

This site's return deserves a better blog than this one. What do people think of Nicholas Publishing's decision to take over The Dubai Mall magazine from the failed TMF?

While property remained screwed in Dubai, retail and hospitality may be picking up. But does this mean the mall's magazine will covers its costs with advertising any time soon?

Emaar, client for the magazine, are furious with Russell Frame and Andrea Slater after TMF let them down, not just with the mall magazine but with other publications.

What's new? Qatar Airways, Thai Airways, Kempinski Hotel and many other former clients are disgusted by Frame and Slater, just as all former staff are appalled by them too.

The battle for redundancy payments continues at Tecom although TMF claims to have no money left.

Good luck Nicholas and Emaar.

Anonymous said...

Russell Frame claimed to have won his legal case with his employer. Before he somehow landed a job at TMF, he fell out badly with his employer who accused him over several things which frame disputed. It's a known fact among TMF employees that his passport was confiscated while he was battling in court. He claimed victory in the end and got his passport back after three years. Soon after he made his first trip outside the UAE to the UK. During the legal battle Frame was keen to hide his identity. He confided to several TMF employees who can verify this that Andrea Slater and husband Rany Doleh had his car and villa in their name.

Anonymous said...

Back? But not for long. Come on DMO, this is the best blog in the Emirates. Give us something to brighten our day.

Anonymous said...

Thanks for taking over this blog to ensure its survival. It's important people have a voice. I hope you check the site regularly and upload comments. I also hope some of the TMF comments are not as heavily censored as before. Things that went on at that company are actually worse than described here and staff are still waiting to be paid. Stories are not exaggerated or libelous.

Anonymous said...

As opposed to the high quality of writing, sentence structure and punctuation in the original post?

C-, must try harder.

Anonymous said...

What is happening in Dubai Media world at the moment. I'm well out, but am surprised to hear TMF is still standing. I hear also that CPI Financial is hawking itself around for buyers. What of (de)Motivate? And has al Nisr coughed up for a spell check for Gulf News' subs desk? Who's doing well - How's Mediaquest doing? What's this new publisher Eaglemont Media I heard about? And that's before we open up the cans of worms that are ITP and The National...I used to enjoy reading this blog, shame that it dropped off.

Anonymous said...

Does anyone know the name of the company Russell Frame worked at before messing up TMF? I mean the company who confiscated his passport for three years due to a legal dispute. No wonder Russell was publicty shy, not appearing on magazine flannel panels or on website contact links. He even had his villa and car in Andrea and Rany's name. All very odd.

Anonymous said...

I think people stopped posting on this blog because they don't get their comments published - like my last comment on this post.

Anonymous said...

Anyone know which company this might be about?!

A British woman who moved to Dubai with her husband a few years ago for work in the media claims she was made redundant because she was pregnant, and the company didn't want to pay her the 45 days stipulated maternity leave.

Anonymous said...

That will be CPI...

mediamonster said...

"I also hope some of the TMF comments are not as heavily censored as before. Things that went on at that company are actually worse than described here and staff are still waiting to be paid. Stories are not exaggerated or libelous."

Unless someone wants to post some concrete evidence of many of the claims made, we're not going to constantly run comments about the same people with no new news angle.

The person constantly spamming this blog with the same derogatory phrases about TMF's owners in a clear attempt to google-bomb them can frankly fuck off.

Either give us some material we can actually use - legal and court documents, dates, links to news articles - or go and create your own blog about them. DMO is not here to act as a showcase for someone's personal vendetta.

You can easily email us with a proper story, which we will consider publishing: dubaimediablog@gmail.com

Anonymous said...

In my view Nicholas Publishing decisions to take on the Dubai Mall magazine is just another bad management decision. The company already lost one mall magazine (published for Wafi) and made nothing on it so why go for this again. The management there is seriously clueless.

Anonymous said...

Yes ITP ....ripe with corruption as always. One very senior editor on a well known consumer mag was very quickly removed from her post just last week for indulging in some highly unethical practices.

Anonymous said...

Give Nicholas a chance. The Dubai Mall magazine is good and the mall itself is doing quite well so advertisers may book.